I'm voting for a complete story after the challenge is done. :) Seriously, this is good. Really good. Like published good, though I'm not an expert. I would totally buy it though.
My only constructive criticism would be that it seemed a bit disjointed from the parts we've been reading. I had to go back and remind myself where Esmond and Irene came into the story. I'm not sure if that's because I'm not as invested in them as characters yet, or they've been overshadowed by the faerie characters (I assume they're some kind of faerie race), or if it's just been a while since we saw or heard from them.
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Date: 2012-08-12 05:51 pm (UTC)My only constructive criticism would be that it seemed a bit disjointed from the parts we've been reading. I had to go back and remind myself where Esmond and Irene came into the story. I'm not sure if that's because I'm not as invested in them as characters yet, or they've been overshadowed by the faerie characters (I assume they're some kind of faerie race), or if it's just been a while since we saw or heard from them.
I'm totally loving this and can't wait for more!